Read the assignment for today on the homepage: COMPARE THE QUALITY OF ONE OF THE EXAMPLES TO YOUR WORK IN GENERAL.
DID YOU LEARN ANYTHING VALUABLE?
PICK a passage that has not yet been chosen and WRITE A COMMENT according to the assignment's directions.
There are 10 passages: that means that the first 10 people will each choose a different one. The second 10 people will start over; and so the 3rd 10 people.
(When you write a comment, start with your comment's number -- if you are the first person or the second etc. Then CLEARLY INDICATE THE NUMBER OF YOUR CHOSEN PASSAGE.)
SKIP THE USUAL "I AGREE" "I DISAGREE". It is irrelevant. Look at the quality of argument and the quality of style in supporting the arguments. WRITE COMPLETE SENTENCES not fragments. REVIEW before you click "send".
Feel free to engage each other with replies etc.
One task of next week's writing assignment will be to copy-and-paste your comment (for grade.)
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ReplyDeleteI chose the third passage because I agree with the author completely. When I was writing for that particular assignment, right off the bat, I knew that I would not pick Peppino. I feel that the author of passage number 3 put exactly how I feel about Peppino into words. The passage was concise, clear, and the author was able to perfectly explain his/her opinion.
ReplyDeleteOlivia's is the first acceptable comment to this post. The purpose is to comment about "what is good" in the passage of your choice; and to compare your work to it. So, analyze the QUALITY of the argument, not whether you agree with it or not. Exercise critical judgment.
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ReplyDeleteI am the first to comment on passage 10 because I agree strongly with. One main reason why is how the way the author was on point and very clear to what was needed to be said. Secondly on how the author made a connection to Pascal and used their own struggle to connect with Pascal. It was well written that it flowed nicely. However when doing assignment I had that connection as well but i feel like I could of wrote more and to the point. I guess as a writer I have to work hard and never give up.
ReplyDeleteI chose the eighth passage because I connected most to it. The author explains the experience of Pascal immigrating to America and his transition from a labor worker into a writer. I feel like the author portrayed that well by writing a little but giving details and examples from the text. I believe that the author brought up valid points that i was able to relate to. When reading the story of Pascal, the points mention by the author such as eating the banana and "Ave" entertained me as well. Although, well reflected in the last two sentences, the experience coming to America must be an amazing experience but I wouldn't be able to see myself experiencing that great change.
ReplyDeleteI chose the sixth passage, not only do I AGREE with the author fully, but I appreciate how the points he makes are clear, and without any question. He stated historical fact, and reason to provide his answer. I believe that I might allow my emotions to get the best of me in situations like that, and maybe I should present my argument in a cleaner manner.
ReplyDeleteAs I said, it is irrelevant whether you agree or not. I chose to include that passage not for the opinion it presents, but because it presents it effectively.
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ReplyDeleteI chose the third passage. Like the author said I also am totally unlike Peppino. The author states he dislikes the character and says he is nothing like Peppino. Peppino's reasons for coming to America were at first honorable, but as time went on, his priorities changed. I too am unlike this character as is the author of this passage. The author gets straight to the point of how selfish Peppino soon becomes. As the author states, Peppino selfishly ended his search, and decided to live the American dream in a corrupt way. Peppino went at it the easy way through a life a crime. Others influenced his corruptness and the love of family became second to his own obsession. I believe family comes first without allowing others to change my ways of life. I feel to achieve to the American dream you have to work hard, you have to be committed, and always be true to yourself.
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ReplyDeleteI decided to choose passage four. The reason i thought this passage was good is because the person goes down to the core of writing about what he/she observed in the notes. He/she was talking about how they wrote what interested them rather then just joting down notes. Also that they feel a emotinal connection while doing a reading. It's different then mine because i feel like i could of been more detailed when i did my assignment. And when i wrote my notes, i just wrote everything i was reading rather than what interested me. I feel like i could of justified my opinion more.
I also admire a good "note taker". I for one, know I'm a horrible note taker and wish I could improve in this aspect. This person seems to have fun while doing so because they are looking beyond what is written.
DeleteI chose the second passage because it is very clear to me that the student took a moment to gather their thoughts together before composing their response. They gave relevant examples and descriptions of Pascal's actions and compared and contrasted them to their own actions and way of thinking. Rather than just saying that they are exactly like Pascal, they also discussed how they are different; this sort of multi-layered response demonstrates that the writer put careful thought into their answer. For the next writing assignment, I will try to do the same with my work.
ReplyDeleteI choose the fifth passage because I can relate to what the student wrote, similarly we both migrated to America for ' better opportunities ', like pascal and needless to say although times are much better presently than they were before one of the greatest thing to have is ' faith in the future'. The student wrote about herself which makes it more relatable, something I should do more often.
ReplyDeleteI was impressed by the passage 9. The statement was clear, highly intelligent and very well organized. It is obvious that the student is capable of carefully constructing sentences, reflecting his/her thoughts without any grammatical errors. Also I noticed that punctuation was used correctly, which is usually ignored; I always pay attention to that and try my best to use it properly as well. Most of the time it is difficult for me to write in English, since it is my second language, therefore, I have to do double work in my head. Translating my thoughts into English first and then spending some time to make them clear to the reader is not an easy task to do. Sometimes, I just give up and write as a total imbecile. I deeply respect that student's writing and hope that one day I would be able to rise to the same level.
ReplyDeleteI was astonished at passage 6 mainly because throughout all of my life studying English grammar, I was always told whenever writing an essay never to ask any questions to the reader. I find it ironic because it was never acceptable before, but in this case it is being used as a prime example of perfection. It captures a sense of exploration in thought, I believe I should try and improve that about my writing as I only stick to what is being asked.
ReplyDeleteI choose passage 10 because I agree with it and I can relate to it the most. I feel like I wrote something similar for this task in the fact that I choose Pascal for the same reason (he worked hard and never gave up at any cost, which is like me) but not as good as this person. I like how this person wrote something simple and to the point. This passage made me realize that when I write I need to start doing something similar and not in away beat around the bush. I need to first organize my thoughts and then be clearer when I write them down.
ReplyDeletePassage seven caught my eye due to simple fact that there's a personal connection to the writing. While I feel that my grammar skills are fine, a majority of my work have been somewhat distant and impersonal. I am afraid of saying too much to those who aren’t family or close friends. It's stunting the exploration of my work and the exploration of myself. I hope to become more willing to put personal thoughts online as this writer has.
ReplyDeleteWalter, I used to be like this as well. I'm not sure when I grew the courage to share about my personal life, but it's not as bad as I thought. Being open about yourself takes a lot and many will appreciate and admire your ability to do so.
DeleteI choose passage two because I can relate to the writing and thinking skills of this author. The best theory of writing is never to over think on what should be written. A great analysis comes from a plan, which will help you and prevent any ideas that might be missed.
ReplyDeleteI chose passage 8. I wish I could process my thoughts and write them out in the way it was done in this particular passage. They have a definite opinion of the book and it's transparent through their straight forward post. It's clear and easy to understand. When I put my work next to theirs, there is a big difference. I tend to provide a lot of detail, because that's my way of expressing myself. If we share anything though, it's our way of self-reflection off written work.
ReplyDeleteI chose the fourth passage because I can relate to the writing, I agree with the author completely and I agree with the authors thinking skills. When I was reviewing my notes for Sons Of Italy, right off the bat I knew I was looking at the book through an historical viewpoint. The author of this passage knew what he was writing about and uses his curiosity in his work. The fourth passage was clear and I was able to understand his/her opinion perfectly.
ReplyDeleteI chose passage 7. I like the way this person expressed himself, he did not have to over think the question to much and wrote his response as a journal entry. I overthink the question to much and end up writing irrelevant thoughts. I will keep this in mind for the upcoming assignments.
ReplyDeleteI chose the 5th one. I thought it was well written and I found it very easy to read. It is clear and concise. I find when I am reading even my own writing it does not flow easily. I also liked how this person could relate to the character. It was a sincere account of this person’s experiences, which made it intriguing to read. I will try to emulate some aspects of this person’s writing into my own work.
ReplyDeleteI chose passage number 6 because the points that the writer wanted to make were clear. I also like how the writer explained his opinion as in form of a question and answer . I think that I need to include this style of writing in my assignments so I can have clear and good arguments and It also makes the paper interesting to read.
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